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here, at the bottom - lovers.
there are lovers disassembling
themselves
      lost in and to the desperate ryhtmn in of - waves.
- did you think the continents
moved themselves? see them slip,

in an open sleep. less go, come.
come and, and - again. trembling


here, at the bottom - their eyes
are lightless. hollow bodies left
restless,

          the sea does not sleep.
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Liquid City by ~Is-lnds is a gorgeous display of poetry crafted on an emotional level between unsettled silence and restlessness. ( Featured by Nichrysalis )
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i-am-a-bridgewalker Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
aaaah I feel like I read this in a previous incarnation...congrats on the DD!! well done.
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:iconis-lnds:
Is-lnds Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2013
perhaps! probably.

:bow:
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:iconwhisperingwatermelon:
Wow, awesome. :D
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:iconis-lnds:
Is-lnds Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2013
Psst. Thanks! :D
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:iconsigma-echo-seven:
Sigma-Echo-Seven Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013  Student Writer
This one still blows me away. Or rather, it pulls me along with it.
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:iconis-lnds:
Is-lnds Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2013
I'll blow you away later on
for now i need to get you in
position.

;)
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:iconsigma-echo-seven:
Sigma-Echo-Seven Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2013  Student Writer
Crafty.
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:iconis-lnds:
Is-lnds Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2013
devilish workshop
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:iconforestmeetwildfire:
forestmeetwildfire Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Goodness, this is gorgeous. Especially this:

did you think the continents
moved themselves? see them slip,

in an open sleep.


Just, wow. Definitely deserving of the DD, congrats!
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:iconis-lnds:
Is-lnds Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2013
goodness, you're gorgeous.
glancing through your gallery
(good look) i see why you'd
appreciate it.

thanks! ;)
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:iconforestmeetwildfire:
forestmeetwildfire Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:blush:
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:iconis-lnds:
Is-lnds Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2013
no blushing.
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:iconforestmeetwildfire:
forestmeetwildfire Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:noes:
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:iconis-lnds:
Is-lnds Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2013
:pat:
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:iconfervvent:
fervvent Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Oh my god I don't know how I didn't see this until now! congrats on the DD wes, teheh. :heart: you definitely deserve it
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:iconis-lnds:
Is-lnds Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2013
haha
thank you bay :heart:

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:iconfervvent:
fervvent Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
you're welcome c:
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:icongreenleo94:
greenleo94 Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Gorgeous. I especially like: "in an open sleep. less go, come. / come and, and - again. trembling" The beat is fantastic, and I love your phrasing. <3
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Is-lnds Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2013
thank you! you're lovely.

your comment made my night. im happy you're satisfied with beat and diction - i thought it was simple, maybe too simple. but it seems to work!

:)
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greenleo94 Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Aw. :3 Thanks.

Glad to hear! :D Your piece deserves stuff like that. It's simple, but that gives it a stark, pounding quality. Sort of like the ocean. It works perfectly.
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:iconis-lnds:
Is-lnds Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2013
:tighthug:
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:icontravelgirlxx:
travelgirlxx Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2013
You've been featured: [link]

Keep up the fabulous work!!
:heart:
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:iconis-lnds:
Is-lnds Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2013
haha i'll try
and thank you!
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:icontravelgirlxx:
travelgirlxx Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2013
;)
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:iconem-arginated:
em-arginated Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Congratulations on the DD. (:
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:iconis-lnds:
Is-lnds Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2013
thanks Em!
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em-arginated Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
anytime!
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:iconis-lnds:
Is-lnds Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2013
:hug:
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:iconiastartov:
IAstartov Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013
Awesome work with words! Like, how it sounds.
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:iconis-lnds:
Is-lnds Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2013
thank you sir!
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Sigma-Echo-Seven Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2013  Student Writer
The economy of words here is outstanding. So much is accomplished. Well done.
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:iconis-lnds:
Is-lnds Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2013
thats a huge compliment coming from you. thank you! ill try to keep it up. :)
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schriftsteller Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2013   Writer
Gorgeous inside and out. It flows like the tide, and like loves slowly drifting together only to be taken away from each other again. I also loved how subtle the sexual undertones were-- really striking. This is one of my favorite lit DD's I've seen in a very long time. Congrats!
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:iconis-lnds:
Is-lnds Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2013
you want to know how much i love this comment?
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:iconschriftsteller:
schriftsteller Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2013   Writer
I would love to know how much you enjoyed my comment, honestly.
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:iconis-lnds:
Is-lnds Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2013
your comment sums it all up. the loves drifting close and then apart - caught that way. its perpetual really. couldn't get away from it if you tried. im glad my undertones were subtle enough, its more fun that way.

and then your last comment is sprinkles.
i get cupcakes and sprinkles too?! youre
too kind!

:tighthug:
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schriftsteller Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2013   Writer
Aww you're too sweet! I am happy that I caught the entire meaning, though. I love when that happens. Sprinkles always have to be included. :hug: :)
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archelyxs Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2013
Beautiful work. Congrats on the DD! (:
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Is-lnds Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2013
thank you lovie. (:
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:iconkaitforest:
KaitForest Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2013   Writer
congratulations, love! i am so happy for you, i was waiting for this, wah
:heart:
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:iconis-lnds:
Is-lnds Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013
thank you darling! now
you get your wish. haha
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:iconkaitforest:
KaitForest Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2013   Writer
the beach?
:la:
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:iconis-lnds:
Is-lnds Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2013
2/3 better make that
last one count. hmm?

:lol:
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:iconkaitforest:
KaitForest Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2013   Writer
i'll believe it when i see it
:smoking:
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:iconis-lnds:
Is-lnds Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2013
:sarcasticclap:
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:icontiganusi:
tiganusi Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2013  Professional
i'm just going to go out on a limb and say that this poem could be strengthened by making the syntax more legible. there's one chunk in particular that's striking me as overwritten or possibly just containing a word you didn't mean to put there:

desperate motion in
of - waves.


poetry does play with grammar, sure, but it should also adhere to the constraints of the language enough to form an image beyond "the words are words".
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Is-lnds Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2013
thank you for the suggestion!
it was a strange experimental way of saying

desperate motion in,
(desperate motion) of
- waves.


i have a habit of that with my writing, but whats in my head isn't easily translated to the viewer unless i say so, so i completely understand your thought on that.
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:icontiganusi:
tiganusi Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2013  Professional
That actually works really nicely! Thanks for the clarification.
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:iconis-lnds:
Is-lnds Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2013
no problem. im glad you pointed it out, ive always wanted to make sure people fully understand what im trying to convey.

cheers!
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2013
Congrats on the DD, love. :heart:
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